Learning Outcome 4: Peer Review- Be able to critique their own and others’ work by emphasizing global revision early in the writing process and local revision later in the process.
This learning outcome is focused on the ability to critically read a peer’s project and make constructive suggestions for change, in addition to the ability to evaluate one’s own work and identify opportunities for specific improvement. In the paragraphs that follow, I will describe my peer editing process using perspectives (ideas, claims) and the explanation of the text’s relationship to them. In addition to local editing with signal phrases and in-text citations, I also followed the writer’s thesis to the conclusion.
I thought your paper was excellent and addresses an issue many people talk/know about but I’ve never really heard it discussed. The way you developed your story and integrated it into the grander scheme of things was very insightful and impactful. I can say for myself that when I told my mother I was having cramps like I’d never felt before, she kept asking if it was period cramps. Turns out, it was appendicitis! If I didn’t advocate for myself, my appendix would have burst. Standing your ground in the medical field is extremely important, nobody knows your body better than yourself.
You blended the class readings well in your essay. I thought you made a good connection talking about HIV and the medical bias around it for gay people. Your paper flowed really nicely between all prompts, it didn’t even feel like it was three essays combined.
Of course, with any typed writing there were very minor misspellings but it did not impact the cohesiveness when reading it. You did a really good job speaking for yourself and on the issue! It isn’t always easy telling a stranger about personal medical issues, so I hope you still felt comfortable sharing it. 🙂
After having my essay peer-reviewed, it was brought to my attention that there were some tweaks I could make. Some sentences needed a bit more clearer and comprehensive. Some points needed to be more clearly connected/introduced.
